Tuesday 12 May 2015

Creative Paragraph-Man in space.

This week we have been learning to rework our writing to make our paragraphs interesting for our audience. We started by writing a creative sentence about this picture. As a class we will choose Nate's sentence because we liked it the best and wrote a paragraph each to follow the chosen sentence. Here is the beginning of my story that starts with Nate's sentence.
Man in space.jpg


A spaceman bravely walks out into the icy milkyway. Into the portal he goes he finally reached to the planet Mars.


When he got to Mars he had to go on a big mission because there was a big bomb in the village and he only has 5mins before the bomb explodes. When he got there he only had one more minute to cut the wires on the bomb.


When he was cutting the wires he only had 50 seconds up to 1 second he thought it was going to blow up but it didn't so he survived.

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